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Book Title: The Summoner|
The author of the book: Randy Massey
Edition: Randy Massey
Date of issue: June 5th 2012
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I guess my biggest issue with this book is that while the story gives the seemings of an epic challenge and adventure, everything is pretty straightforward and easy for our heroes. Given a magic sword, kill all the bad guys, run away just in the nick of time, get to the one area the bad guys won't enter, constantly given advice on how to move forward or where to go, everyone volunteers helpful advice, information, or guidance. Overall, their biggest challenge is walking/running to their next event. Very little risk is presented -- scrapes, bruises, and some other minor injuries alone -- and since the story is told as a historical account to a large group, the reader knows ahead of time that they will be successful.
Personally, I had a hard time caring about the main character. Why should I care or believe that Raven is special other than she is devoted to her family and mentioned many times as being part of the prophecy. It wasn't truly justified or explained, in my opinion.
Furthermore, since the tale is told by a storyteller telling the events, the reader never truly gets inside the heads of the the main characters. And while additional description could have been provided, there are very few scenes that give depth to these flat characters. It was very hard to have much empathy for the two main characters. Why should I care more about Raven than any other person in the story?
On a positive note, the author is pretty creative in populating his world with interesting creatures, and some of their back stories, sadly only a few of which are actually relevant to the plot of the story, are truly amazing and possibly unique. While I wasn't really happy with some of the side stories in this regard, I think that I would enjoy some of these tales if they were fleshed out and told on their own.
Other feedback for the author:
•Editing and proofreading are required. There are typos and word substitutions on a regular basis throughout the text, for example, "twenty foot high." Many of these errors are word substitutions, possibly autocorrects, so spell check alone won't help.
•If you don't want to write dialog to develop characters, then write scenes (plural) that demonstrate their actions exemplifying the traits you say they express. Why should the reader love or hate the character you are writing about?
•Alternating common images and words with strange ones actually can add to a story, but too much and too many variations detract from the story so that the reader pays more attention to your words instead of your story. Punnish and similar words -- minims (mini rock people), bhranahs -- carnivorous piranha like birds, bhurdi -- owlet birds; just plain strange words and names Pishy... and kankans; and maybe it is just a pet peeve of mine, but why are there all these hyphenated names. If it is an important cultural thing there is never any reference made to it, plus your main character goes by Raven/Ravendune.
•Narrator breaks don't really add to this story and seem more like an interruption in many places. If your purpose is to build tension or slow action, then actually make this a relevant part of the story. Dropping extra information or telling a side story beyond "I'm telling this story to my clan."
•Unless they are the most forgetful people in the universe, which you give evidence to the contrary via basic remembrance of the prophecy, if this tale was so epic to their world, it would not be forgotten during their lifetime.
•Pet peeve number two: All the strange names throughout the story, and you could only come up with Evils for the bad guy's henchmen?
•On a more minor note, it might be a good idea to reference a thesaurus every now and again so that some of the descriptions have more variety and depth to them. Throughout the story, some scenes were very descriptive in their detail and others were very bland.
This story has a lot of potential, and it could have been so much better than it ended up being. Maybe that is why I was so disappointed at many points throughout the story. I hope that the author can work on his craft and develop a clearer expression of his creativity.
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